A poet I’m working with who writes narrative poems that are touched with stream of consciousness, and whose work I find riveting, nevertheless sends me this email:
Most places I send this work find it incomprehensible. . . . My models for the blank verse are James Merrill’s long poems, Robert Frost, and Nabokov’s novel, Pale Fire. I know these poems don’t come up to their standards, so I’d like to improve their quality. I’d also like the narrative clearer so people don’t find it so confusing.
I get this a lot from writers chasing the gods of “clarity.” I find they’re work remarkable, and have no problem “following” its engaging turns. Maybe this sentiment is workshop residue; maybe they’re sending the work to the wrong places. Probably both. It’s the Apollo on one shoulder, Dionysus on the other thing.
Here’s my answer, and what I would say to just about any poet sending out work these days, i.e., in the midst of contemporary chaos and a good 60 years after Frost.
Well, first of all, they’re wrong, by which I mean, readers who find this work incomprehensible are looking for something you’re not doing. Many readers find Pale Fire incomprehensible. Many find Hamlet incomprehensible, what with all that dithering, baiting and Freudian undertow. Nearly everyone finds Gertrude Stein to be a certain kind of incomprehensible. Like Nabokov, or Shakespeare, or Stein, or Emily Dickinson for that matter, you embrace a word within a dreamscape. Which is where we live, and like our brain, which right-side-ups everything our eyes see, our brains also try to make a certain kind of sense of chaos.
Our job as writers is to capture that chaos and come to some kind of terms with it. As in dreams, not everything adds up, because things don’t add up in putative “real life.” Order is provisional. As you know. As you suggest in your poems. I like that you give permission to that part of the unconscious which, like the dreamer, let’s go of the superego, which is what makes us, in dreaming, psychotic. Something to aim for, that artistic psychosis, without which no Goya or Picasso or Joan Mitchel (“No Birds”)

or Helen Frankenthaler (Mountains & Sea, 1952

So, my theory of narrative is that we humans need story so badly that we’ll manufacture one from the slimmest evidence, whether from the cave walls at Lascaux and Altamira, the papyrus on which a shred of of Sappho resides, or, say, that fragment of a letter your mother wrote your father during the war in which she seems to be channeling Joyce.
The job of the artist (poet) is to provide just enough to invite the reader in, show the reader around the place, say some sort of mutually satisfying goodby. So, I can give you great exercises for clarifying your narrative, if that’s what you’re really after, as long as you understand that “clarity” is a construct. We have time to do that together with a few of your poems, and then you can take it from there. Or you can rejoice in what you’re creating. Or both.
Denny Stein
August 3, 2020
Jeffrey – I think you just made me cry. Perhaps I can get back to writing now.
Thank you,
Denny
eldenstein
August 3, 2020
Thank you.
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amtwellspring
August 3, 2020
Many thanks for sharing this, dear Jeffrey.
with gratitude and loving wishes,
Ann M. Thompson, MA
Certified Medical Reiki Master
Whole Soul Healing Arts, LLC
Silver Spring, MD
240-308-2250 (cell)
amt7347@msn.com
Katherine Roth
August 3, 2020
I appreciate your support of the clarity-chaos continuum!
Jeffrey Levine
August 3, 2020
Nice! And also, I’m a big fan of all three English words with a double u!
Deborah Laurel
August 6, 2020
I’m mulling the characterization of an artist as a psychic real estate agent!!
débora Ewing
May 19, 2021
I’m glad you mentioned Lascaux caves, because I did write a poem about them. It was published in Plainsongs by Hastings College Press. At the risk of seeming bold (I am) I’ll share it here.
dead language
cave-wall creatures
iron oxide and ochre, rock against rock
lapis lazuli ground with care
in that stone there
this is a lost voice
unsilenced
relic words preserved here
bard-weavings retold between friends
lions without teeth
bulls without legs
hands disconnected
severed at the wrist
songs so precious once
hidden within caves
from side-eyed questions and
mouths with jagged tongues
lost to collective judgment
import sealed in stone
divination alone
as it was in the beginning
what this poet must have carried
to keep writing
stories bastard-born
no circle of huts could bear to hear
nothing comes out in a straight line
the animals run on for miles